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Author: Shashi Bhushan Singh
I’ve lived in Hyderabad, Mumbai and Ahmedabad. I loved all these cities and all of these have been recently under terror attacks.
I wonder every time I hear a person is killed by a terrorist attack, what is the solution to Terrorism ?
Better technology ? No – it is always vulnerable because terrorist can also be a tech savvy.
More security ? – expensive and inefficient solution, can be suffocating for locals.
A compromise with terrorist ? – Something out of question looking at current scenario.
Then what ?
I think – the root to terrorism is 99 % religion and 1% land.
Land issues can be diplomatically handled.
The one that needs to be really taken care is religion conflicts.
The only answer to terrorism is just stop taking care of religion.
Let us create a no-religion world. We do not follow any religion.
We shun everything. Hard to do. Very hard infact, but then we need to ask ourselves what is religion and what good has it done to us.
Did any god create religion ? No.
Relgions crops after the gods or prophets are gone.
It is man made.
Let us destroy it. Religion has given us nothing but differences and wars.
Imagine, will a terrorist group attack a country where nobody knows what is their religion ?
I doubt.
There will be dissolution of terrorism with dissolution of religion.
“What about good things in our religion ? ”
First of all, there are only few good things and these can be rather become part of study of sociology or science, where we question the beliefs and theories of religion to arrive at most logical conclusion.
It sounds tough, but I think religion needs to disappear from earth otherwise soon we human might.
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This is a very heartfelt article but the core theme of the article title is not fully addressed. The article could do with a lot more fleshing out to actually talk about measures to be taken to counter terrorism.
Here are 5 things that we liked or would change/revise:
1. Title: The title is catchy and will get readers interested.
2. Format: The article could do with some editing and structuring to help it flow better. The paragraphs are too short and that makes the flow abrupt. If you are using 1 line paragraphs, then keep it consistent throughout rather than move between 1 line, 2 line and multiple line paragraphs. There are a number of extra spaces before and after words that need to be deleted.
3. Grammar & Usage: The article needs editing and there are some issues with usage of forms of words. The conversational style will work for an informal audience/blog. For the article to be considered for professional publication it needs editing to correct the punctuation, spelling errors and language usage errors. There also needs to be consistency in the capitalization. All the statements after the questions should start with a capital letter. You may want to consider our Detailed Expert Review or editing option
4. Language: The use of short sentences throughout the article makes it very insubstantial. The core idea is not built up well. The use of incomplete sentences and incorrect phrases like, “More security ? – expensive and inefficient solution, can be suffocating for locals”, dilutes the impact of the article. There are also some instances of multiple usage errors in 1 line like: ‘The one that needs to be really taken care is religion conflicts’. It should be ‘The ones that need to be really taken care of are religious conflicts.’
5. Target Audience: Intro/Closing are missing this is important to get the reader interested. The article would have a better impact if the solution provided was more substantial and of interest to the reader.