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Author: Jay
A step to any occasion and if one is showered with a garland of fresh flower with the presence of thousand of people can undeniably make a difference and impression as well.
Fresh wreathes symbolizes freshness, greenness and color. It is the necessity for all the happy moments that men celebrate. A fresh feeling can work wonders irrespective of the user. A wreathe that emits a smell of freshness can create a new horizon of love paving the way for good relationship in its buds especially in business or in social life.
A person with fresh ideas, a vendor with fresh vegetables or an artistic writer with fresh thoughts can make a good market for themselves then why not these fresh flowers. If available in bulk, customers never fail to notice the bunch of freshness. As past has stood as a silent witness, the present as an active participant and the future is also clear for the fresh wreathes those are going to have a good market.
Fresh wreathes can be an instrument of settling a long awaited deal. An initial gift of a fresh wreathe is a perfect eye opener for a good start. Corporate occasions depend completely on the fresh objects as these present the sense of freshness.
Fresh wreathes are available in the market with plethora of ranges so that all can afford to buy. If a celebration of an occasion is at hand, whether it is a birthday or an anniversary or a party, no one takes care for a little extra that he is going to pay for having a good impression that lasts long.
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The theme, sentiment and idea behind the article is good, however the central idea is not conveyed effectively due to poor language ability.
Here are 5 things that we liked or would change/revise:
1. Title: The title has a grammatical error; this does not create a very favorable impression about the article that follows.
2. Format: This piece could do with some structuring. The article needs to flow better to improve readability.
3. Grammar & Usage: A basic edit and proofreading would greatly improve the article. Grammar needs to be improved. Punctuation and modification of sentence structure will help highlight the finer points. You may want to consider our Detailed Expert Review or editing option.
4. Language: Indian English errors take away from the content of the article. Eg: thousand of people should be thousands of people. Also usage of phrases needs to be reviewed. Eg: It is not possible to be showered with 1 single garland. It could either be showered with garlands or greeted with a garland or something one those lines. The word ‘wreath’ is wrongly spelt as wreathe throughout the write-up. Replacing the word wreath with bouquet would convey the message more effectively.
5. Target Audience: The introductory sentence is not coherent and is weakened by grammatical errors. Thus it is not able to create an impact on the reader.